Hi, I wrote this poem specificaly for her, I would like some advise or assistance... actualy just simple critique :) thank you... oh and please note that the title of this poem is her full name and I've also spelt out her name verticaly as first letter of every line.
please be honest, thank you

Rohinpreet Kaur Rai Cale

Rose gardens in eternal gloom of lushing lust,
Oh how magnificent with complete and utter thrust!
Holly lands of heanves on earth could not sight,
In The name of endless desire for what you and I fight!
No Man, woman or creater could ever steal from us this feeling,
Pure, Untouched and timeless ~ our love is healing!
Rising like the sun over oceans of Eaden,
Every last breath in torture and pain is beaten!
Envy Me no more for I've become the love of my love,
Tell me more, So much more as I'm but a lost fool flying high like a dove!

Kisess so sweet and pure,
Asking for so much more is inevetably just a simple Cure!
Urges overcome the two of us as we gaze deeply into eachothers eyes,
Rising ever so high and never saying goodbye, just reaching for the skies!

Rose gardens in eternal gloom of lushing lust,
Awakened we are by the memories which have turned to dust,
Infinately caressed by love where we lay together with complete trust!

Come home my love, my lustfull life, my Lure,
All I need is more, so much more of you, my wife, my pure!
Lands of heanves high, seas, mountains will never stand in our way,
Every word is everything I mean and Say, but promise, promise me you'll stay!?