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Craving Sin

Four walls, cracking, painted grey.
One window, open, and in her way.
Four walls, getting closer, caving in.
One woman, open heart, and with a lustful sin.

He walks just in her reach
And with his scent he persuades,
For her to open up her peach,
And attend the masquerades.

Legs open, vulnerability.
Longing for some tranquility.
Lips so sweet and tender kiss.
Her body quivers with perfect bliss.

One woman, heart broken, how sadly she does miss.
The sin that walked in and gave her that deadly kind of kiss.
Four ways she could have escaped, and never would have met,
The Devil in disguise that night, and that game he did set.

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Distance – Tue, 2008 – 07 – 29 22:55
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Erotic and triggers one's imagination! Nice work of art. Thanks for the sharing!

Lost Soul – Mon, 2008 – 08 – 04 16:21
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Responding to the responses

I see that you actually responded to two of my poems. Thank you for the compliments. It's nice to secretly share poems without coming out in the open. Anyways, I look forward to reading your works!!!!

Distance – Tue, 2008 – 08 – 05 22:51
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Wow, someone responded!

Ty pammor, for responding. I'm new at poetry and have a lot to learn. I hope you understood that Craving Sin was a poem with a moral to it. IN other words, the woman would have been best, as you said, if she just walked out on sin.

Any CONSTRUCTIVE critisism would be much appreciated if you are more skilled in poetry...or if anyone else is as well..

Thanks a bunch!

Distance – Fri, 2008 – 08 – 01 19:25
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Craving Sin

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Sad Misses enables the sin to walk in
Sure the kiss would be deadly
only if she had called for the Angel
to show her the exit before the deadly game....!!!

Allways do your Best and Leave the rest to God

pammor – Fri, 2008 – 08 – 01 05:06
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