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RosalinnMesshamora — Mon, 21 Jul 2008 01:25:25 -0700

Let Me Be Your Love

The strength you've show me
Is one that will last us the ages
It flows from me
Encases me
Takes me
And keeps me safe.
This feeling is like no other
Though our good-byes are bittersweet
The good mornings are sweeter.
The good afternoons are warmer
And the good evenings are closer

When we speak, I can feel that touch
Through the love you show me.
I can feel your arms around my waist
Your breath on my face
And your lips on mine.
They are so tender
So loving
So caring
Something I can never give up
And never will

I feel it all the time
That you're near

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becuaseitsme — Sun, 22 Jun 2008 07:46:20 -0700

All the dreams slipped away , all the words i meant i couldnt say. I think ive spent all of my tears there . i remember to live or die i didnt care .i hope days will take us somewhere better . i hope time around you lasts for ever, but only hope seems not good enough to become real ...and tears will never be able to change anything ... help me understand the way you make me feel happy , in love .. without any word without any try .. i think becuase i love you,,, you think or you were thinking about me the same .. and now why im the only one to suffer becuase of the way i feel . why im standing on such a breakable thread , while you are leaving every thing behind and sitting in a safe place aplace where my words cant reach to your heart...

i need you,u need me

becuaseitsme — Sun, 22 Jun 2008 07:44:06 -0700

Im lost without you,you were my home..im feeling cold take me in your
arms..don’t go away..don’t go away ..
I wish i can catch you from my dreams ..i hope I can go back with time..but I really cant ..every thing reminds me of you , I look at the stars ..ours are missing ..and suddenly the nights are darker ,the birds are quietter .. I cant sense any thing no matter how simple it is ..are we apart now? ..is it the end? How can I rebuild my life,my past,and my dreams in a blink of eye?
Every single wish is gone ..havent you thought about me.. you think you can replace me with somebody else ,baby ..even if u don’t see me ,I will always be the reflection of your eyes.. even if you shut your heart ,I will still inside ..even if you forget about us ,every detail of your life is about me..even if you go far,you will still hear my voice into your ears ..even if u kiss amillion girl ..the taste of my lips will stay on yours ..even if you try to breathe another air, my perfume is the only air that keeps you from death..

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phil3271 — Wed, 04 Jun 2008 15:30:35 -0700

A YOUNG GIRL CRYING

Last summer, more than a year ago now, I heard the morning dew calling to me. From my window the fields stretched into the distance, then down into the hollow, the airless hollow, I called it.

The sun was dancing on the dew like a yellow butterfly. And all around there was greeness - wet, wet greeness. So I dressed and called for you and you came.

We went walking through the morning dew, kicking the pearls into the air, smiling. Happy people. Went walking into the distance to the sound of crickets and the shadow of a bird circling around the sun. We watched the bird’s shadow dip into the hollow, until it suddenly darted away into the haze of a steamy summer morning. I didn’t want to go into the Hollow.

EROTIC POEM

twinvdrifter — Tue, 03 Jun 2008 08:20:57 -0700

ENJOY

You walk around me, stand at my back,
Lean in so I can feel your rack,

You pull my hands out of my sight
Put them together and tie them tight,

You whisper, Be my slave tonight,
I promise to treat you right,

Your hands feel cold
As you slip on the blindfold,

You glide your hands down my back
All I can see is black

You take loud steps walking around
Making sure I hear the sound,

As you push me, against the wall,
I hear you say, I own your soul,

Knowing that I can not see
You bring yourself to a knee,

You lean in without a sound
I feel my ankles being bound,

numbers

phil3271 — Mon, 19 May 2008 17:01:05 -0700

NUMBERS

We the people of the earth,
Rejoice and sing the anthem of our birth.
Our loves, our joys, our way of life,
And the way we fight through pain and strife.
I am one, I am two, I am all,
No-one can even challenge my call.
At last I’ve found who I want to be,
I am myself, I mean I’m free.
Free as the air which is my blood,
Careless as cows who chew the cud,
Tameless as winds on a winters’ night,
None can perceive my aimless flight.
I carry myself through all my pain,
And there is no-one I can’t tame.
My mind is my own, my thoughts are free,
I’ve cut the cord which strangled me.

scourge of the man

phil3271 — Sun, 18 May 2008 15:00:43 -0700

SCOURGE OF THE MAN

When we look back on the life that has been
And think and wonder on the things we’ve seen,
Mother Earth unfolded all her glory
As if we were reading some beautiful story.

Her realm is as boundless as the sea,
But as gentle as a breeze that caresses a tree,
Her strength is almighty, but bound up with love,
Which transports her people to heaven above.

But we on earth depreciate this
And don’t realize we’re living in a land of bliss.
Just look around at a bird or a tree
And think of the beautiful things you see!

destiny

phil3271 — Sat, 17 May 2008 06:31:58 -0700

DESTINY

Where is the door that leads me to my destiny?
If I could only rediscover, even retrieve
At least a portion of the things I used to understand.
My life tends to flow like a stream through a forest
Green, sometimes serene.
Mind probing but I can never find its end.
Please tell me why I can’t heed the pull.
I used to have love of life, even know my own mind,
But why is my sky so grey?
Sitting there sweet pimple on a mountain top
As clouds gather and envelop you, and me
Where does land end and sky begin?
Where does my life end, and what of my soul?
Softly, slowly, silently my way is being shown,

Hope For Love

Aragon — Fri, 16 May 2008 15:42:24 -0700

1. Can I see the heaven parts
When my Love departs
Can I hold you where you are
Its like reaching for a distant star
Where can I find thee
Come back home to me..........

2. My life is beautiful when you are near
When I close my I can feel the fear
That you won't be here when I open mt eyes
I hope that all of this are just lies
Free my spirit so I can feel thee
Soaring high, away we flee......

3. Take away the pain I feel
With our love that we seal
The magic is in the air
Take me to your secret lair
On the coldest winter night
I'll will hold you tight.....

A Lost Love

phil3271 — Thu, 15 May 2008 16:13:39 -0700

PAT
I dreamed of you last night,
How I wish you were with me now,
But life never seems to smile at us.
Your face wanders with the clouds and
As I look up the wind takes you in its arms
And carries you away from me,
And you are all there is to know to me.
As the tears fall who will be there to catch them?
And when I stumble who will steady me?
This tight-rope gets longer and thinner,
Gossamer thread please don’t break
I really have to get to the other side.
How can I lose so great a part of myself
And not suffer?

I shall shout my love to an empty parking lot